2)
The feedback I received was very consistent. Out
of the 4 comments I received, each person said that they wanted more detail on
exactly what I was going to serve. Andrew really helped me by giving me exactly
what my food truck was going to serve. It surprised me because he gave a great
definition and wording to explain my service. I also got a lot of positive
feedback saying my hand gestures helped engage people and my voice was a lot
more passionate.
3)
I honestly only had to change a little amount in
this pitch. My statistics are good, but exactly what I serve needed to be
changed so I added a sentence or two that shows the options a customer will get
exactly when they walk up to the food truck. I think my pitch is starting to
feel almost memorized and I am very comfortable with it.
Hey Amanda,
ReplyDeleteYou made great improvements for your elevator pitch. It seems memorized and effortlessly spoken. I am glad you added more detail to what you are going to serve. I can see the passion in the pitch now and more detail helps a lot to persuade people to invest in your product, especially by saying what you are going to sell. Good job and great improvements.
Hey Amanda,
ReplyDeleteI can definitely see the improvements between your three elevator pitches. You're becoming more comfortable with the information, and in turn more comfortable with yourself being in front of a camera sharing it. I'm happy that whatever insight your classmates and I gave you were suggestions that you took to heart. I'm still a big fan of the statistics you included in your pitch, and I think that your idea looks better than ever. Keep up the great work!
Hi Amanda! Wow, you did really great with your elevator pitch! You have definitely improved over time even though you only had to make slight changes each time. I really liked that you included a few options of food that would be served because it really helps people envision your business concept. Overall, your pitch was really great and the additional information you included really improved it!
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